My Portfolio

 

Sign my guest book after you read my writing.

Jon Webb a.k.a. - SNAPPLE

I chose these pieces to represent my best work this quarter because they all represent my growth as a writer.

The first piece I chose was the found poem. I chose this one because I found it to be interesting to write. Also it turned out kinda good.

The second piece I chose was the criminal mind. I chose this piece because I really liked the way I captured the narrator. This poem is one of my best pieces class.

 

 

Arrange dull life to dark mountainous enigma
Harvest life, yield no cancer
Place thought increase adventure
Total hunger adding to redemption
Everything's life, everything's death
Point to the light
Never to the evil


 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Let me know how my writing affected you. 

Date:
05 Jun 2001
Time:
18:56:20
Remote User:
 

Comments

The first piece and well only piebe that I can see was good although I can't really clarify on what PE it actully is but it sounds good anyway. But I am a little confused with the first line I don't really know what you were trying to say, maybe in another draft you could make the poem a little more clear on what you were trying to do. My scale is: Help, Adjustment, It's good for know, Need no fixing. I think you earn a It's good for now because you put your point across partly but not completly.

Your evaluator: The other John


Date:
11 Jun 2001
Time:
01:53:12
Remote User:
 

Comments

Your first piece is hard to say what PE it is. But, I really enjoyed reading some of your work. I really liked when you said, "Everything's life, everything's death." It really is a line that is true in society. I would also agree with John by saying your first line is a bit confusing. But, other then that I wouldn't change it. If, you were to make more changes I would do the beginning over again. My rating scale is A for Admirable, W for Worthy and S for sinister. Your work deserves an A. Your Evaluator, Crystal


Date:
11 Jun 2001
Time:
21:22:50
Remote User:
 

Comments

In your draft of a found poem, you tried to describe a happy place, with nothing bad to it. You succeeded in pointing out that there's no bad wherever this place is. I was confused as to what the enigma you mentioned was. Maybe it would be helpful if in another draft you took out "dull" when describing life, Unless you mean to say that a happy life is dull. If that's what you mean in the poem, it would help to have more emphasis on it or whatever the main idea is. My rating scale is Phenomenal, Thought-Provoking, Written to Avoid Getting a Zero, and Needs a Lot More Work. I give this piece Written to Avoid Getting a Zero. Your Evaluator:Erin


Date:
14 Jun 2001
Time:
18:32:43
Remote User:
 

Comments

Hi. Mr. McGonegal here. This is your portfolio evaluation. Do you remember what I use for an evaluation scale? An "AW" for AWARD WINNING, a "P" for PUBLISHABLE, or a "p" for PASSING. Your first piece: p. Overall, your portfolio represented some of the good work you did this quarter. It was a pleasure writing with you this quarter, and I hope you will keep writing and stop by trueteacher.com to see what your successors are writing for "found poems," "criminal mind" stories, and travelogues. Best, Mr. M.