My Portfolio
 

Sign my guest book after you read my writing.

Ignatius Moore--a.k.a.--Alice Walker

PORTFOIO COVERPAGE

I chose these writings to put in my portfolio because it shows my creativity and maturity as a writer.

I chose my letter poem because it shows my creativity and that I am gradually becoming a mature writer.

My found poem is one of my best works, but I see it more as my poem that shows graditude towards nature.

 

 

Nature's Cries

Man is wounded to perfection,
Truth is not in half.
Be family to the universe.
Fear not being alone...
See the sky, touch the rocks,
And dip your feet in shallow water.
Speak, listen to nature,birds whistling plans &
Cars roaring.  Sleep... be accompanied by glistering
Stars, shooting stars moo, planet.
Will death ever take this away from me?



 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
My Portfolio
 

Sign my guest book after you read my writing.

Ignatius Moore--a.k.a.--Alice Walker

PORTFOIO COVERPAGE

I chose these writings to put in my portfolio because it shows my creativity and maturity as a writer.

I chose my letter poem because it shows my creativity and that I am gradually becoming a mature writer.

My found poem is one of my best works, but I see it more as my poem that shows graditude towards nature.

 

 

Nature's Cries

Man is wounded to perfection,
Truth is not in half.
Be family to the universe.
Fear not being alone...
See the sky, touch the rocks,
And dip your feet in shallow water.
Speak, listen to nature,birds whistling plans &
Cars roaring.  Sleep... be accompanied by glistering
Stars, shooting stars moo, planet.
Will death ever take this away from me?



 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Comments

hey iggy your work is really great,make sure you always keep that passion for writing inside! :) nikki


Date:
05 Jun 2001
Time:
12:22:55
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Comments

Hi Ignatius. Your first piece is a found poem in which you attempted to show the reader how nature makes you feel as a human being. You also used great detail to give a mental picture of certain aspects of nature.You succeeded in showing how you feel about nature, and how you would not want to live without it. I felt a little confused when I read the second line: "Truth is not in half." I am not quite so sure about what you were trying to say. It seems like a very deep thought, but perhaps too deep for comprehension. In another draft of this piece, I think you should make the poem into two stanzas, ending the first stanza after "Fear not being alone..." because it ends one idea and leads to another. Perhaps you should also change the second line a bit, so to make the thought easier to understand. My rating scale is SPECTACULAR, GROOVY, KINDA COOL, and ALRIGHT. Your piece earns a GROOVY+. Your Evaluator, Emily


Date:
06 Jun 2001
Time:
12:11:19
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Hey Iggy I enjoyed your poem "Nature's Cries", in which you tried to convey the emotions of nature and its need to be appreciated. The poem had good impact. You succeeded well in drawing the reader into your cause and seeing a side to the world that has been forgotten. I was a little confused by the line say ing man is hurt to perfection. It is not so clear as to what you meant by that. In another piece of this writing I would arrange the words more evenly so as there are not lines with a small amount of words, then the next has so many. My rating system is " Ruggedly Awesome", " I'd read it again", and " The thought was there". I gave you a " Ruggedly Awesome" because s a found poem the words are arranged well and there is a clear point. Good job! Your evaluator, Chris M


Date:
11 Jun 2001
Time:
20:02:57
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Your found poem sounds like a song! I cant even tell that you took these words from something. This piece is definetly a success in what it was suposed to be. The only thing that confused me was that I could not tell if nature was speaking for itself or if someone was in nature listening and seeing all these things, I know as I read it I saw all of it. If you were to make another draft of this poem maybe you could add taste and smell to your poem, so what if you dont find it from somewhere. My scale is: from 0db to 100db, and this is definetly loud! (87db). Tim Mogavero


Date:
14 Jun 2001
Time:
18:28:21
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Hi. Mr. McGonegal here. This is your portfolio evaluation. Do you remember what I use for an evaluation scale? An "AW" for AWARD WINNING, a "P" for PUBLISHABLE, or a "p" for PASSING. Your first piece: P. Overall, your portfolio represented some of the good work you did this quarter. It was a pleasure writing with you this quarter, and I hope you will keep writing and stop by trueteacher.com to see what your successors are writing for "found poems," "criminal mind" stories, and travelogues. Best, Mr. M.