English 10: Writing Portfolio
|Essay the first: Origins|
|Essay the second: Literature|
When I had to pick a funny story about my family, I asked and thought about the funniest story about my family. I came up with cleaning incident before going to the cape with my brothers and my sister about seven years ago in the middle of July.
It was a hot summer day in the middle of July in Dedham. My brothers and sister Dan, Riley, Cameron and Cortneigh and I were all ready to go down to Harwich, which is on Cape Cod. Then we ran into a to a problem that my family and I had to get the house clean. But my brothers and my sister and I had an eager to go down the cape because Dedham gets boring in the summer and we couldn’t wait to go swimming and fishing. So we decided to help my parents clean the house. So my parents Laurie and Scott decided that the family was going to the cape for the weekend. My Mom told us that we would go down the cape as soon as the house was clean. So my brothers and sister decided that we would help my parents out by cleaning. My mother was in the basement cleaning and doing laundry and my brothers, sister and I were manning the house upstairs. We took the dish liquid and poured it all along the hallway and all over the tiles. Then we brought the hose in from the outside of my house and started hosing down my hallway like my Dad did to the back porch. A few minutes later my Mom started calling my Dad’s name, Scott! Scott didn’t A few minutes later my Mom started calling my Dad’s name, Scott! Scott didn’t answer, so my Mom started going up the stairs and was greeted with a gush of water upon the opening of the door. Still not knowing why there was a big puddle she turned the corner seeing five of us cleaning the flood up, as my Dad was sleeping in the back room. There were soapsuds all over the floor and everywhere else. My Dad woke up and had a few choice words to say to us and kept some to his self. After cleaning up my Mom took us out to the car and she let out a big scream, like as if she had see a mouse. It was my neighbor’s dog that helped himself to the food in the car. All the food was shredded all over the van and driveway. As my parents cleaned up another mess we all had smirks on our faces and told her “If she left earlier none of this would of happened.” My parents told us that we weren’t going to the cape till later that night when everyone was asleep.
This story reveals about us that we weren’t patient when we were kids. It taught us to ask our parents for permission to do something or it will be awhile till we leave for something. Since then, we had another incident where we were in a rush to get home from the boat and we slacked off cleaning the boat and in doing this we were careless in taking home the fish from the cabin. A week went by before some one went to the boat again and unfortunately it was my father. The stench from the fish being in the cabin for a week was more then anyone could bare, again choice words were exchanged from my father and this time he didn’t hold back.
Dear Elizabeth Barrett Browning,
On behalf of the committee for 2005 textbook, we are looking for more interesting and more excitement in the poems that we choose to add to the textbook. We are looking for these types of poems to get high school students more into reading and understanding better. I am sorry to inform you that you will not be attending next year’s edition. This was a hard decision to make for the committee and I because your one of the top love poem writers. The great textbook we are looking for next years edition, what none of your poems meet are expectations because we are looking for to catch a tenth graders attention and get a tenth grader more involved. Writer’s and author’s who describe different emotions in one poem will help a tenth grader understand how writers use their words to describe what’s going on and how the writer is using words to describe his or her emotions. The words that you have chose for your poems were too hard for a tenth grader to understand. So we will not have any of your work in next year’s addition.
I want to use your work for seniors then instead of sophomores. Mrs. Browning the reason why you were not chosen for next year’s edition because these poems that we have read of yours would not reach out and grab a tenth graders attention. The rhyme scheme and the choice of words that you have chosen for your poems weren’t that great. Those words and expressions would take a long time for a tenth grader to figure it out. “With my lost saints” is a verse from your poem sonnet 43; this verse is too complicated for a 10th grade student to understand the meaning of that verse in the poem and we found many in other poems of yours. Many of your poems we have read, your rhyme scheme wasn’t that good and a lot of your poems were written about love and mostly about your love life. Like I said before these are not the type of poems that we are looking for.
A “good textbook” means to the committee and I, is that the author or writer should be able to describe his or her feelings in an authentic way. If the poet does this it will be easier on a tenth graders part to understand the choice of words the poet uses. If the poet chooses to use big words the poet should write the meaning of what the word means. The good textbook should also have free verse poems and a great rhyme scheme to a poem. To add on the committee and I found a critic of your work that says you go a little to far with your love poems. The critics words he said was “The English poet Elizabeth Barrett Browning believed that her husband, the poet Robert Browning, had loved her into full being. For most of my life, I thought that this wonderful sense of completion was found only in love's reciprocal promise. But now I wonder if loss isn't also an attentive suitor. Why? Because it was only during the lonely and bereft times that I really learned how to love myself.” The committee and I agree with this critic. These poems need more excitement and need to be less of your love life. I’m not trying to tear apart your work I’m just trying to make a point.
Mrs. Browning to make 2007 edition you will have to meet certain expatiations that we have listed in the third paragraph. Just follow how we described how a poem should be and we will take another look at your poems. A rejection letter is hard to write to someone and to receive one. But keep writing poems so that you could make 2007 edition and try out for other books that we make.
Sincerely, Chris Blizard
Many poets’ to make their poems and stories more interesting use superstition. Major works that deal with superstition is the Ancient Mariner, The lady of Shallot, and many of Charles dickens stories and poems. Many poems that had superstition in the 1800’s had many phantoms and ghost in them. A poem that I came across was The Ivory Gate of Dreams. This was a poem that was written about phantoms in 1889 by Houghton Claude. Who is not well known?
After reading this poem it got us to believe in phantoms, and deadly roses. The Ivory Gate of Dreams shows superstition in the mystery of ruined castles. “ Mysterious phantom lands of Myriad names where deathless roses may kill you and phantom’s living beyond the roses.” Showing that roses may kill you if passing through and that phantoms are the ones living beyond the roses. “Athwart the night the souls of poets creep.” This quotes shows even the souls of poets can even creep people out.
The colors gray and silver mean death to the people living in the 1800’s. Roses are the sign of death, to show that someone has passed away. Mysterious phantoms were very scary or thought as monsters that haunted the continent of ruined castles. Blue and silver represent the moonlight in the 1800’s. White flowers show there was a newborn has been born on the continent.
This work hasn’t been taking seriously because of the superstition that Houghton Claude used in The Ivory Gate of Dreams. The superstition such as roses being deadly and roses being black and gray, make this poem less interesting. Deadly roses make a poem or a story make a story awful. Mysterious Continents would not have a wizard in their continent and showing the sign of life where deathless roses grow and lie among the phantoms.
The reason why this work should be looked at because to see what people were scared from back then and how they got rid of their fears. A critic I found was name Eric Taylor quotes from his article against phantoms “Phantoms do not make any story interesting and that if your going to make that into superstition you better off writing stories for kids”
English a language that builds every day with new words. English is known as one of the most creative languages today by coming up with all-different forms of expressions that build up are society today. There are over 800,000 thousand words in are language today and some words have the same meaning making matters worse in the world. Musicians today make this language hard to understand at times by using words in different context and making up there own words that no one understands. Showing that the English language can harm the world in today’s time. One of these words today that is used in our language today that is used in many different ways is “Low”
The word “low” most common definition of today is not to high but the direction downwards. Webster dictionary shows low meant, “the characters of sound uttered by cattle.” Showing this major difference in meanings of the same word. This could cause someone to get hurt if mentioning the word in a different meaning to someone when in bad situations. Webster’s New Pocket Dictionary defines low as “ Not high.” The Oxford English Dictionary defines the word low in many different meanings but the most used today of Low is “not tall, little or short.”
History of low that was found in the Oxford English Dictionary was first noticed as law in the book of Beowulf. 1549 the word low appeared in (Compl. Line 39) as the meaning characteristics sound uttered by cattle. Gravell in Thorpe Anlection line 17 low is used in 1150 as not tall, little, or short. The word “low” built up into many definitions over the years that are now used in many different ways today. Showing how certain generations change are language and meanings.
Mentioning low to people and asking how they use it in their speech today. There were many different uses; Connor Corrigan said first thing that came to his mind was “something small close to the ground.” Scott Blizard had a different thought of low saying low meant “low status or popularity.” As Connor in his teen years and Scott way older shows that there is different meanings in different age groups. Growing up in a certain age group can mess you up do to people coming up with new meanings for these words making are language so much harder to learn.
Low a common word used literature which is found in Beowulf “wand to wolenume waelfyra maest hylnode for hlawe.” Low appeared in (Compl. Scot. Line 39) “the nolf maid noyis is vitat many loud Lou.” Describing the sound uttered by cattle. Chaucer uses low in (Anel. S and Arc. Line 95) “For in her sight to her he bare him low. Literature shows the build of the English language forming the words we use today.
Field & Stream uses the word low in a different type of use of low “Then, the low-mumble of the waves is quickly joined by the whir of lines being cast, by the wet plunk of sinkers hitting the water, by the happy reel-screech of a fish on.” This use could not be found in a dictionary. Neither does the word low-dose show up in any dictionaries. Which is shown in Consumer Reports on Health “Focuses on the risk of discontinuing low-dose aspirin following a heart attack or stroke in the U.S. Link of aspirin withdrawal to a strong increased risk of second heart attacks; Importance of strictly adhering to the aspirin regimen; Benefits of aspirin.”
English is one of the most difficult languages to learn. From all different perspectives, taking down all definitions of one word could make you misinterpret the word. English is a hurtful language by new generations coming up with new words and new uses of a word. Making are language hard to understand.
Crossing the Cemetery